The shape of australia

Frances — I’m glad you’re now focused on the essay, but you have work to do. It’s obvious what you copied and what your writing, but more importantly, your own sentences are not well constructed. and you’ve lost sight of the thesis — how geography and history explain the development of Australia.

You’ll need to spend time organizing your thoughts — I suggest an outline. I’m hoping you can do this and pass, but you will have to devote some serious time to this. Try for another draft, and this time, include the geography that has had an impact on the development of the island. See my suggest outline below.

I. Geography
A. Ancient island broken off from Antarctica
1. Volcanos and erosion by wind and rain
2. Fertile land only on some coasts
3. Desert is 20% of the land area
4. Movement to equator means heat, dry wind
B. Early world movements allowed for home sapiens to migrate
1. Homo sapiens arrived by boat and over land bridges
2. Aboriginals became isolated when glaciers melted and water rose
3. Aboriginals lived isolated on the island for 50,000 years, unchallenged
II. History
A. British arrived in 1788; convicts brought in for labor
1. Island was needed for convicts after American Revolution
2. British government established in Australia to run trade and export resources
3. British murdered Aboriginals, took their land, pushed them into the desert and bush country
4. Aboriginals slowly gained rights; voting in 1967
5. Racism still profound; Aboriginals only 2-3% of the population.
B. First world position due to western capitalism; Aboriginals were not a part of development

note : the tittle is the shape of Australia, is an expository essay. and needs 4 references from the web